Extended Practice: 30/03/17 Crit Feedback

Today was another crit for our Extended Projects and after my last one, I was very nervous to show my work. I didn't get the best feedback last time but it just meant I had to try harder which I feel like I have done. I was able to show the first 30 second Drink Driving animation as well as the animatic for my Texting and Driving animatic with some clips dropped into it.

This is what I presented for the Drink Driving animation and my feedback went as follows: 

• Hold back on the lens flares a little bit. In some scenes they work and in other it is too much, perhaps reevaluate which sequences need them and tone them down for others? I agree with this in hindsight, so I will adjust accordingly. Something I am happy with when working with After Effects is having all the compositions and files saved in separate folders which means I can always go back in and change them.
• The car crash sound at the end needs to be even more severe. At the moment it sounds still like just glass breaking, but to have more of an impact it needs to be perhaps glass and metal crunching sounds. This way it will be more realistic.
• In the scene where the car is driving forward from the side, there could be more weaving in and out to illustrate that he is still drunk driving.
• Opportunity to have more blurry scenes, especially in the driver's POV shots. Perhaps, the scene could start blurry and then come into view? The same goes for the lorry sign scene.
• Change the lorry sign to an English one if targeting British audiences.

The feedback for the texting and driving animatic:

• When the car stops at the traffic lights, the car might need to pause/stop even longer and his distraction may even be emphasised by a car beeping him from behind? I didn't think of this but it is a very clever idea!
• Change the car style so that it is different from the other animations.
• Who is it aimed at? New drivers? Maybe contact some companies for realistic statistics? 
• Get in touch with ROSPA perhaps?

Overall I have received some really good constructive criticism which I will be happy to apply with the work I have done so far. I am on schedule with work so far but I am worried that if I keep tweaking I will not finish my third animation.