After being given more feedback from my teacher, I have finally narrowed my story down even further. We both agreed that there was a lot going on for just 20 seconds, especially since I added more fillers to emphasise the awkwardness with the two characters, but I was advised that it was not needed. Going off my storyboard and animatic, my animation can start with the matchstick man and woman stood beside the window as opposed to them starting off at the dinner table. But with a view from outside. Then the narrative can follow through true to the storyboard, and either end with the characters on fire with a bit of enigma as to how they get out of their predicament, or if I have time left out of the 20 seconds, end it with them blowing each other out with kisses.
We also discussed the audio I could involve. Since they are right by the window, I could introduce noise from outside, from cars and just people in general, but at a very low volume so it doesn't interject with the diegetic sounds from inside the house and between the two characters.
Overall I am very happy with the feedback I have got as it has it has given me a clearer mindset in what I will be animating as opposed to just a grey area.
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